It looks dead rabbit down there,
I don’t know (me: did I cue Gemini
lurking in my purse in my phone with something like these words
to begin its efforts? The very AI I removed from my phone this morning?)
what your question is.
Can you be more precise? Where is “down” in this situation?
Is this a metaphor?
Is this what you meant to say?
Where is the location?
Here are some prompts you can use: When I say “dead,” I think of…
(Me, speaking to you in the car): When I reached down to pick up the hose in the deep grass, I felt, jerked my hand back, then saw several mushrooms big as frisbees, color of wild rabbits in the rain, gills black as whiskers. By our tiny bird bath. At first, I thought…I’d like to identify the mushrooms. As soft as overcooked pasta. Fragrant as rain on ash. At first, I did think dead rabbit. It wasn’t a poem, a metaphor, the whole episode a simple story. A simple story, just me touching something else alive. Just me surprised by aliveness.
Hi Carol,
YIKES…..not sure what to make of this….
Hope you are well! Donna
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Lovely! And complex. Narrative into (really) anti-narrative: the flowering of imagination from observation, from being in a moment. Not written to please, as AI is programmed to do, but to witness and savor. Poetry!
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Did the birdbath need to be tiny? It’s not the focus of the poem–the startling aliveness–so why did AI emphasize it by a mostly inappropriate adjective. Liked the gills analogy. Liked the color of the mushrooms as rabbit. I have seen large mushrooms, but never the size of frisbees. THAT, to me, would have been startling. Paul
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